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Cold Bean Porridge and a Virgin Milkmaid

Disgruntled Goodreads Expat

A fragment

I'm not doing NaNoWriMo this year--I've never lasted more than a day or two, in the past--but I had a few lines in my head when I woke up this morning and I've been mulling over them in my head all day, so I wrote them down and now I think I have the beginning of a story.  Maybe.  Check it out:

 

Working title: "Always Remember That You Are Free"

 

There would be a note and a mint on her pillow when she got home from work; there always was.  The note, always punctuated with a smiley face, would say "Thank you for your services to the State!"  The mint, always wrapped in plastic, she would flush; she always did.  She hoped that the spies assigned to sort through her waste would inform the spies assigned to search her room that she didn't care for the mints they always left her; failing that, she hoped it wasn't the same mint.

 

(fin)

 

That's all I got, so far.  I'm mulling over a few other paragraphs, so I may continue.  It's a banality-of-dystopia kind of story.  What d'you think?  Decent beginning?